My apologies. I have to confess, I'd been drinking a bit last night when I read it, and failed to realize that I had only read the intro and first page - I didn't realize there was more when I thought "Well. Short first chapter".
I'm going back to re-read it, the whole thing this time, and will keep your comments and explanation in mind when I do.
Then I'll be back with any comments I may have.
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I've always had trouble with "person". I've always thought first person ran as "I picked up the hammer and nailed the coffin lid down with some vehemence" and third person ran as "Walter picked up the hammer and nailed the coffin lid down with some vehemence", and have never been sure just what second person was, maybe "He picked up the hammer and nailed the coffin lid down with some vehemence."
Another thing I've never gotten down pat is diagramming a sentence. I don't know the intricacies of what the different sorts of words are called, nor the rules of how they are used. I've been reading since I was 3 years old (started by reading road signs on the roads - we traveled a lot), and learned to write by reading what other folks had written. As a result of that, I more or less internalized sentence structure without ever learning what the parts are called or what the rules are for stringing them together.
Because of that, my comments may be something less than entirely helpful.
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I'm going back to re-read it, the whole thing this time, and will keep your comments and explanation in mind when I do.
Then I'll be back with any comments I may have.
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I've always had trouble with "person". I've always thought first person ran as "I picked up the hammer and nailed the coffin lid down with some vehemence" and third person ran as "Walter picked up the hammer and nailed the coffin lid down with some vehemence", and have never been sure just what second person was, maybe "He picked up the hammer and nailed the coffin lid down with some vehemence."
Another thing I've never gotten down pat is diagramming a sentence. I don't know the intricacies of what the different sorts of words are called, nor the rules of how they are used. I've been reading since I was 3 years old (started by reading road signs on the roads - we traveled a lot), and learned to write by reading what other folks had written. As a result of that, I more or less internalized sentence structure without ever learning what the parts are called or what the rules are for stringing them together.
Because of that, my comments may be something less than entirely helpful.
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Diogenes was eating bread and lentils for supper. He was seen by the philosopher Aristippus, who lived comfortably by flattering the king.
Said Aristippus, ‘If you would learn to be subservient to the king you would not have to live on lentils.’ Said Diogenes, ‘Learn to live on lentils and you will not have to be subservient to the king.’
Said Aristippus, ‘If you would learn to be subservient to the king you would not have to live on lentils.’ Said Diogenes, ‘Learn to live on lentils and you will not have to be subservient to the king.’