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"How I would save star Trek discovery" - Armonica_Templar - 08-16-2017 This is an attempt after veiwing most of the fans reactions The new Star Trek discovery series seems to be in deep S#$% Money grubbibg execs bad writing issues with merchandising monthly access fees Well @"guohua" You said the should hire me to write it Well I can solve it with a monologue in the first few minutes then run the series One actress Mira Furlan Quote:Mira Furlan (born 7 September 1955) is a Croatian actress and singer. Internationally, she is best known for her roles as the MinbariAmbassador Delenn on all five seasons of the science fiction television series Babylon 5 (1993–98), and as Danielle Rousseau on Lost. One alien race Na'kuhl So without further ado My own little short Death of the dream _____________________________________ A boot pulls the old blade from back of a now dead facedown humanoid in a purpleish uniform.. The figure is slowly dancing as it sings in slightly broken english, "..cause Im the Queen of wishfull thinking.." Standing in front of an archlike structure.."Oh Danlen.. Did you really think that you people won the temporal cold war.. That you have stopped and erased the N'Kuhl.. " The Na'Kuhl female spits on the dead agent, "The mighty federation.. " Insanely the attractive Na'Kuhl female dances as she keeps singing.. "The Gaurdian of forever.." She walks back over to the dead body and stabs it in the head, "You humans have a phrase.. Double tap.. Yousee.." She pont to the guardian, "I have study human history.. My mate you had Archer kill.. Now revenge is mine.." Explosions fill the air as starfleet officers can be heard screaming in pain. Her laughter fills the area near the guardian.. "You see Danlen.. I realised something no race has ever defeated the federation long term.. Sword, Guns, Phasers and Photon Torpedoes.. The Dominin, Klingons, Romulans, Cardassians, Suliban, Augments, Sona, even the feared Borg and their enemies Species 8472.. Undine.. Not a single one extracted a victory.." The woman sings as the sounds of the few starfleet personel approach.. "Suckers.." The Na'kuhl female laughs as several gasses rise into the air, "War crimes.. From human history.. You see.. I have Realized what Silik, Khan, Dukat, the Borg Queen, and countless others never did.. You cant beat an idea with forces.." Cries of agony come from around the area.. "Bio weapons mixed with mustard gas," Kicking the dead body as hard as she could.. Looking at the gaurdian of forever, "You see I am doing what they never envisioned.. I am attacking the federations greatest strength.. I am going to subvert the dream.. Its not that hard.. A small note here.. Small note there.. And tada.." One sound of Agony reaches her, "That sounds like Pee Card.." Laughing, "You see I am going to destroy the dream.. Ny getting you humans to do it to yourself.." "Ne..Never," A voice almost unrecognizable fills the air.. A rifle falls to the ground and the human does not get up.. "Not Pee card," Laughing.. "Kirk.. You see.. Danlen.. This is already happening.. I stole from one of your best fiction stories ever.." Walking over se stabs the dead male, "I have already done it.. Now I am just keeping you busy.. Gaurdian.. Initiate security protocol Deluk four..." The Gaurdian hums and seems to glow.. The Na'Kuhl females laughter fills the whole area.. _____________________ Then they just run their show Maybe pay her to laugh at the end of an episode or two .. maybe hints and different actresses playing small parts.. Like recording something.. play a certain song everytime she is in the scene.. ta da temporary band aide RE: "How I would save star Trek discovery" - Armonica_Templar - 08-16-2017 The idea The actress with known sci fi credits and gravatis for the nerd fandom Gaurdian of forever Dead body monologing got the federation to destroy itself from the inside oh, and like a great scifi story of the humans.. She has already done it ______________________ first off.. two shoots cheaply done make up sets first is the script then the actress does her version of what she thinks the character will do you do not let the cast see the shoot tell them nothing about what you have done An ongoing C story you build RE: "How I would save star Trek discovery" - Armonica_Templar - 08-16-2017 ‘Star Trek: Discovery’ Star Jason Isaacs Says “I Don’t Care About The Die-Hard Trek Fans” Quote:[img=750x0]http://cdn1.sciencefiction.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/07/jason-isaac-star-trek-discovery.jpg[/img] RE: "How I would save star Trek discovery" - guohua - 08-16-2017 @"Armonica_Templar" I agree with you and I Know You Could write a movie we both would want to see. RE: "How I would save star Trek discovery" - Grace - 08-16-2017 Hollywood needs to get out of politics, and back into entertainment. RE: "How I would save star Trek discovery" - Armonica_Templar - 09-20-2017 It is a problem I have ran into writing.. Describe the smell of Dog S@#$ to the reader and leave them with the impression they are standing in it.. The creators of Star Trek discovery are better writers then me in this respect, for they have done it with a whole series and I am still struggling with scenes.. RE: "How I would save star Trek discovery" - BIAD - 09-21-2017 (09-20-2017, 10:12 PM)Armonica_Templar Wrote: It is a problem I have ran into writing.. It's acrid. The smell is usually of processed meat and is bitter to our olfactory senses. Dog foul insults the person's basic self-belief because of the taboo of not interacting with bodily waste. From our evolutionary path, we've learned that faeces can have harmful diseases. Of course, this includes excrement from any species. However... if we stand in a pile of it, at that particular moment there's no actual effect. The negative only comes from the knowledge that we have to clean it off. It's time-consuming, an observer's opinion may change of the person trying to rid themselves of the mess without getting any on their hands and also, our ego-protection mode is lowered. Unlike dogs, we gain nothing from the smelly stuff and our social-boundaries demand dog-sh*t is abhorrent. I always recall an old tale told by a man who was sometimes contacted by the police in regards of explosive material. This person blew up tall chimneys and buildings in a controlled environment for a living and worked for companies and Governments. One Saturday evening, a Police Officer called him on the telephone to tell him that someone believed they'd found gelignite in some household coal. Many years ago, gelignite was used to blast the coal seams out in open-cast mines. Because of occasional lax attitudes, sometimes the soft plastic explosive would get through the process of washing and sorting, and actually end-up in peoples homes. So safely taking the gelignite from the homeowner (that was on a shovel), this man pondered whether more of the stuff may still be in the coal that had been delivered and so, went to the 'coal-house' to check. In the UK, coal-houses -back in the day, were a small structure beside the outside toilet of around five -feet square and just high enough for a human to stand in. In the blackness of the unlit coal-house, the man carefully rummaged through the pile of col until he came across something pliable. The unknown 'lump' felt like gelignite and was obviously different from the hard chunks around it. The man squeezed it and gauged the texture in the darkness, knowing that the flexible material could well be hazardous ordnance. Then he heard a dog bark in the home and realised what he may have in his hand. Jokingly, recalled that though he guessed he was massaging a chunk of old dog-sh*t, for some strange reason he felt reluctant to put it down. He hadn't smelled it and since his focus had been on discovering gelignite, for a few moments he continued to squeeze it. That's my dog-sh*t story. RE: "How I would save star Trek discovery" - Armonica_Templar - 09-21-2017 (09-21-2017, 10:36 AM)BIAD Wrote:(09-20-2017, 10:12 PM)Armonica_Templar Wrote: It is a problem I have ran into writing.. I do want to get around to reading your stories but I want to finish what I m writing.. I do not want to accidentally steal anything uncounciously I d like your style when you tell a tale, as expressed in just this last story over a quadraped with a tail RE: "How I would save star Trek discovery" - Wallfire - 09-21-2017 I never knew about Star Trek Discovery until I read this. I do hope its better that the shorten version of its name. I just cant get excited about an S.T.D. RE: "How I would save star Trek discovery" - BIAD - 09-21-2017 (09-21-2017, 07:58 PM)Armonica_Templar Wrote: I do want to get around to reading your stories but I want to finish what I m writing.. No problems, A.T and feel free to use anything in there! RE: "How I would save star Trek discovery" - Armonica_Templar - 09-25-2017 I edited wikipedia for the fun of it Fan Reception- Negative Please note, a simple use of youtube and google indicates fans have a different opinion then the above listed Reception. Reception among fans differs from paid critics. General out line of the main issues collected from searches 1)Paid subscription service Most fans already pay for cable, internet, Hulu, and/or Netflix. This is a sticking point fans and viewers do not find acceptable 2)Mary sue accusations for main character Finding out main character is Spock's long lost stepsister does qualify to fans and others as this trope. Please reference TV tropes for the outlines of Mary Sue/ Marty Stew characters 3)Behavior does not match background A commander loyal for years will not turn on the Captain in an act of mutiny, out of the blue. Please study military history and command structures. 4)Klingons Huge sticking point among fan base a)purple klingons - visual change with no explanation b)Cultural change - issue with action over the dead which is described as dishonorable c)Politics used as a basis- the main changes to Klingons to link them to Trump Supporters 5)Characters Summed up as lack of character development of rest of crew. No one stood out that the fans will pay to see more on 6)Writing style Generally faulted as sub par compared to other series. 7)Accusations in comments sections Paid advertisers by CBS Please note: No evidence was list or provided but I am including this for psychological value indicating feelings of the fans Fans positive response 1)Special effects was the shining point Please note Glitches was down point of this 2)Budget the show has money in the budget and the fans noted this RE: "How I would save star Trek discovery" - Wallfire - 09-25-2017 I love Star Trek Star Trek Original STO Star Trek The Next Generation STNG Star Trek Deep Space Nine STDS9 Star Trek Enterprise STE Star Trek Voyager STV Star Trek Discovery STD I dont think I will be clapping for this one. |